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I know that many of you see me online here at BSFS and this may be your first time seeing a sample of my work -- please be open and honest - I am looking for responses that focus in on flow and ease of reading.  Feel free to be expressive about what is right with what is written as well.  This is raw and directly from my notes. Treat my intellectual property as mine - thank you in advance for reading.  My marketing target is anyone but hoping to attract young male readers 14-20 

Notes on the Trilogy -- 1) Finding your moral compass 2) (Space)Adventure w/a love story component 3) Decisive mature decision making